1. I'm a little confused by "Queen" Henry but I can go with it. 2. Truly remarkable opening with the bold section as a preface/precursor. Wow. I love the way the mind plays back and forth between the "poem" proper and this preface. I love having this starting POV provided. 3. Here's the fun I'm having: "That's a fine how do you do." is NOT facetious. Mating first and asking questions later has a place in the lexicon of hard-wired male behavior. So it's "fine". Then I see a "friends with benefits" scene where an hour after sex there is a heated debate about - oh, changes to the Netflix que or whatever.
oh i did take some liberties with Hank there but six wives and several of them with heads cut off seemed pertinent somehow. and who knows, really, what Hank had underneath all those frilly dressing gowns.
this poem is LITERALLY an exchange i had with Danielle. something was on tv, maybe a nature show i don't know what, and i said the first stanza. then, after a pause, she said the second stanza. and i said on the spot "we just wrote a poem, you want credit?" she declined her share of writing credit for some reason or another. i created the title/preface to suit the two stanzas.
1. I'm a little confused by "Queen" Henry but I can go with it.
ReplyDelete2. Truly remarkable opening with the bold section as a preface/precursor. Wow. I love the way the mind plays back and forth between the "poem" proper and this preface. I love having this starting POV provided.
3. Here's the fun I'm having: "That's a fine how do you do." is NOT facetious. Mating first and asking questions later has a place in the lexicon of hard-wired male behavior. So it's "fine". Then I see a "friends with benefits" scene where an hour after sex there is a heated debate about - oh, changes to the Netflix que or whatever.
oh i did take some liberties with Hank there but six wives and several of them with heads cut off seemed pertinent somehow. and who knows, really, what Hank had underneath all those frilly dressing gowns.
ReplyDeletethis poem is LITERALLY an exchange i had with Danielle. something was on tv, maybe a nature show i don't know what, and i said the first stanza. then, after a pause, she said the second stanza. and i said on the spot "we just wrote a poem, you want credit?" she declined her share of writing credit for some reason or another. i created the title/preface to suit the two stanzas.